Diagnostic Essay Revision

Overview: Now that you have studied the details of sentence combining, I want to see a full revision of the diagnostic essay you wrote in class.  This revision and edit should focus on both mechanical issues as well as the arguments you presented and evidence you used. Feel free to add entire sections if you need to.  Be sure you pay close attention to the sentence types you use; use a variety of all levels of sentence construction since that is a major thing I'll be looking for when I go over these.

Due: Wed, Sept 2nd.

Essay Requirements:

1. Your essay's thesis sentence needs to be typed in bold or set off with a colored highlighter, so it is easy to identify.
2. This essay must be typed, double spaced, and in Times New Roman font at 12 Point size.
3. This essay must be at least two full pages in length (500-750 words).
4. Your name, my name, the class name, and the date must appear in the upper left hand corner of the first page.  (See page 250...)
5. You must include the final word count at the bottom of the essay.
6. Your essay must follow all rules of grammar and punctuation and follow all requirements listed in the original diagnostic essay (reproduced below).
7. Your essay must have a title which accurately reflects the content.
8. You must include the original rough draft along with the revision of the essay to get credit.

Original Essay Requirements on the Paper Structure:

I) You must include a full introduction and conclusion.

II) You will need to spend a full paragraph summarizing Weisenfeld’s argument, so your audience knows what you are supporting. 

III) You must include at least two direct quotes from the article—each of these quotes must be discussed and supported with your own arguments.

IV) You must have a strong, clearly identifiable, argumentative thesis statement.

V) You must adhere to all standard rules of mechanics, grammar, and punctuation.